would you say this is a good thesis for my Romeo and Juliet ...

[TI]

my essay is how Mercutio leads to Romeo and Juliets final demise.
my thesis is : Mercutio leads to ROmeo and Juliets death because he forces Romeo to go to the Capulet party where he falls inlove with juliet,he teased tybalt which lead to his death and makes Romeo enraged, and his relationship with the price which causes Romeo's banishment which leads to misscomunications
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[Sandstorm]

no

[Millan]

This is what you could say:

Mercutio was the reason for Romeo's and Juliet's death. My first reason is because, Mercutio was the one who forced Romeo to attend the Capulet''s party when Romeo wasn't in the mood to go. Due, to Romeo attending the party he fell in love with Juliet. Secondly, Mercutio had teased Tybalt which concluded to his death and made Romeo enraged. Thirdly, his relationship with the Prince, which caused Romeo's banishment which lead to miss communications.

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