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mydiamond · **on:** Jul 15, 2018

INSTRUCTIONS: Edit the following paragraphs for consistent point of view only. Using the first sentence as the basis for the point of view, change the rest of the paragraph to maintain a consistent point of view. Do not edit for any other kinds of changes. For the first time in thirty years, I find myself surrounded by fireflies, and I find myself admiring them with the same wonder that I remember feeling as a child. It is the first week of July, and I watch the sun go down. People begin to count as fireflies emerge, flickering their lights on all sides of me. You know that the darker it becomes, the more fireflies you will see. I watch them fill the sky, blinking on and off. You no longer try to count them. You hold out your hand, and you barely feel a little firefly as he lights on your hand and then gently lifts off as he joins his friends in the air. I stand still, and I follow their movement. I find one that is illuminated, and then I follow that same firefly with my eyes. I see the light slowly fade as this insect moves, its body turning dark gray. In my mind, you see yourself as a small child catching them in jars, watching the jar light up, and then turning them all loose. Today, I do not want to interfere with their lives. I just want to stand and admire them.

What will be an ideal response?

Question 2

INSTRUCTIONS: Edit the following paragraphs for consistent point of view only. Using the first sentence as the basis for the point of view, change the rest of the paragraph to maintain a consistent point of view. Do not edit for any other kinds of changes. Being able to save money is a valuable skill for people to acquire. Young children can open accounts at banks and receive special incentives just for kids. You have your own savings books and can watch my money grow. They can feel pride as they make interest, no matter how small. Once they get older, you find that they can purchase expensive items like bicycles, CD players, or even gym memberships without wiping out their savings account. In a few years, when they are ready to prepare for a career and attend college, I have money that will go toward tuition, books, and spending money. Instead of having to work full-time while I go to college, they are able to work part time or even not work at all while they are in college. Once the habit of saving money has become a part of their lives, college graduates find that saving money on a regular basis allows me to purchase a new car or even invest in stocks and bonds. If you make their investments wisely, they can watch their money grow even faster. Then, when they are hit with unexpected expenses, you are able to pull from their reserve in the bank, knowing that they will be able to replace that money with regular deposits into your savings accounts.

What will be an ideal response?

LP · **Reply #1 on:** Jul 15, 2018

Answer to Question 1

(Words that need to be changed are in boldface.)

For the first time in thirty years, I find myself surrounded by fireflies, and I find myself admiring them with the same wonder that I remember feeling as a child. It is the first week of July, and I watch the sun go down. I begin to count as fireflies emerge, flickering their lights on all sides of me. I know that the darker it becomes, the more fireflies I will see. I watch them fill the sky, blinking on and off. I no longer try to count them. I hold out my hand, and I barely feel a little firefly as he lights on my hand and then gently lifts off as he joins his friends in the air. I stand still, and I follow their movement. I find one that is illuminated, and then I follow that same firefly with my eyes. I see the light slowly fade as this insect moves, its body turning dark gray. In my mind, I see myself as a small child catching them in jars, watching the jar light up, and then turning them all loose. Today, I do not want to interfere with their lives. I just want to stand and admire them.

Answer to Question 2

(Words that need to be changed are in boldface.)

Being able to save money is a valuable skill for people to acquire. Young children can open accounts at banks and receive special incentives just for kids. They have their own savings books and can watch their money grow. They can feel pride as they make interest, no matter how small. Once they get older, they find that they can purchase expensive items like bicycles, CD players, or even gym memberships without wiping out their savings account. In a few years, when they are ready to prepare for a career and attend college, they have money that will go toward tuition, books, and spending money. Instead of having to work full-time while they go to college, they are able to work part time or even not work at all while they are in college. Once the habit of saving money has become a part of their lives, college graduates find that saving money on a regular basis allows them to purchase a new car or even invest in stocks and bonds. If they make their investments wisely, they can watch their money grow even faster. Then, when they are hit with unexpected expenses, they are able to pull from their reserve in the bank, knowing that they will be able to replace that money with regular deposits into their savings accounts.